# forever-poetry

Kiera (Last Leaves)

04/13/2023, 4:30 PM
I don't have too much time (reading while I eat an apple) but i read this twice, once as it is and once without any of the "that"s (something I do in my own work because I tend to overuse "and"). i think you could totally remove them all and that alone will help strengthen it and bring a bit more fluidity