I'm used to cold opens, but I have to say that you have a good concept there. I've found that a theme like this usually works very well with people who enjoy the grimdarkness of the world.
One thing that could help the story is being the character and showing us how she feels about her actions instead of telling us the events. Here's an example for the part when they hold hands at the beginning cause it wouldn't be giving the story away...
"As they walked hand in hand, Kristy glanced at Trace; his smile warmed her heart. She hadn't seen it in a long time. "
Mind you, this is a suggestion.
All in all, you have gone bones for the story here and plenty of words to show us their feelings throughout and still have a flash fiction, if this is what you were hoping for.
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07/09/2023, 12:41 PM
I hope this helps
07/18/2023, 9:26 PM
Thank you for your insights. I will probably rewrite this eventually with your suggestions in mind.